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CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2008.01.28 14:46:00 - [1]
 

"This is the end, my only friend, the end."

It's not quite the end, since we have two epilogues yet to go, but for all intents and purposes this is the climax of Black Mountain and the final stop for many of its people.

Vena Sablentea
Posted - 2008.01.28 15:26:00 - [2]
 

FIRST in Abraxas topic!!Smile

Wow, that was so intense I almost forgot to breathe reading it!!

Props to you, mister

Grimpak
Gallente
Midnight Elites
Echelon Rising
Posted - 2008.01.28 15:36:00 - [3]
 

Edited by: Grimpak on 28/01/2008 15:35:43
climaxes should always have galactic-sized fireworksCool

CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2008.01.28 15:42:00 - [4]
 

Incidentally, remember that opening scene way back in September? Read the first paragraph and see what Alad tells her to do. I had that spine in mind for a long, long time.Very Happy

Wacoede
Amarr
Swag Co.
Sandbox Bullies
Posted - 2008.01.28 16:21:00 - [5]
 

loved this series Abraxas

now all it needs is some talented artist (and maybe a script writer) to convert it to a comic as i think that would really rock

Insidi Us
Amarr
Lyptica
Posted - 2008.01.28 18:32:00 - [6]
 

Originally by: Wacoede
loved this series Abraxas

now all it needs is some talented artist (and maybe a script writer) to convert it to a comic as i think that would really rock


That would indeed be awesome, but its kinda like seeing a movie adapted from a book. You already have what the characters look like and act like in your head, even though its not specifically in the pages themselves. So when you see the images of someone else giving the same story, it doesn't mesh as well.

Had it started out as a graphic novel then I'd love it just as much. But even without pictures it was a fantastic read.

Grimpak
Gallente
Midnight Elites
Echelon Rising
Posted - 2008.01.28 20:32:00 - [7]
 

if transporting Black Mountain to a comic book, I would ask Enki Bilal to do it, specially for his job in the Nikopol trilogy.

The cyberpunk, mythological and spiritual background that some of his works have would portrait Black Mountain very wellCool

Ket Halpak
ANZAC ACADEMY
Posted - 2008.01.28 22:48:00 - [8]
 

Edited by: Ket Halpak on 28/01/2008 22:48:04
Originally by: CCP Abraxas
Incidentally, remember that opening scene way back in September? Read the first paragraph and see what Alad tells her to do. I had that spine in mind for a long, long time.Very Happy


You have a sick twisted mind, more please :)

There seems to be a running theme in CCP with eyes.....

Teyrala
Center for Advanced Studies
Posted - 2008.01.28 22:58:00 - [9]
 

That was amazing.
Always got to have a big explosion at the end Smile

Daedalus DuGalle
Gallente
Infomorph Technologies
Posted - 2008.01.29 01:38:00 - [10]
 

Perhaps the whole series could be put into one pdf or something? Having to pause and click links to get to the next installment ruins the mood somewhat.

Typhado3
Minmatar
Posted - 2008.01.29 07:54:00 - [11]
 

Edited by: Typhado3 on 29/01/2008 08:04:04
awesome end to an awesome series.

loved the spine thing =)

one question though. do we ever find out what happened to zetyn, polok and monas? sry if I've missed some obvious explanation somewhere.

draea said "One of my men is busy with his hobby, but the other I've lost contact with." either one of those man could be krezek as she would have lost contact with him or thought he was busy with his hoby.... so did she lose contact with polok or was polok busy?
Nale said monas died but how? I'm guessing it has something to do with polok.
If zetyn got away before explosion what happened to him? Or is it just a happily visiting phsycologist and doped up on medication to deal with issues due to torture ever after for him?

Elise Masutra
Tleilex Manufacturing
Posted - 2008.01.29 08:30:00 - [12]
 

Nice ending Very Happy

Originally by: Daedalus DuGalle
Perhaps the whole series could be put into one pdf or something?


Just do it man! Put a quick office doc together, add an index, generate a PDF and there you go.

CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2008.01.29 09:20:00 - [13]
 

Originally by: Typhado3
loved the spine thing =)

one question though. do we ever find out what happened to zetyn, polok and monas? sry if I've missed some obvious explanation somewhere.

draea said "One of my men is busy with his hobby, but the other I've lost contact with." either one of those man could be krezek as she would have lost contact with him or thought he was busy with his hoby.... so did she lose contact with polok or was polok busy?
Nale said monas died but how? I'm guessing it has something to do with polok.
If zetyn got away before explosion what happened to him? Or is it just a happily visiting phsycologist and doped up on medication to deal with issues due to torture ever after for him?
I'm glad people liked it. It'd suck to have gone through months and months of buildup only to get to the end and go, "Wait, what?" The whole pod pool thing was a rebirth metaphor given a bit of a twist with Nale being stung by what was effectively a mutant, so I've got a literary excuse for the spine scene.

Let's see...
The two remaining team members on Draea's team are Krezek and Polok. The two remaining team members on Nale's team, not counting Hona, are Zetyn and Monas.

The person whom Draea lost contact with was Krezek, who Nale (most likely) killed in Polymelia. Zetyn escaped before the station exploded; we'll find out what happened to him, and a bit about Hona, in the last BM story, called "Sounding the Horns of the Hunt", published Feb. 25.

Polok is still at large, or at least was until the end of this story. He was the one busy with his hobby, the execution of which included poor Monas. They'll be dealt with in the next BM story, called "Dismantling" and published Feb. 11, though you'll have to look closely to catch the reference.

After these two stories, Dismantling and Sounding the Horns of the Hunt, we go back to single-shots. The first such story will likely be "Dead Skin", from which I read an excerpt in the recent dev blog. After that we've got "The Plague Years", about one man's fight against the Sansha, and then either "A Boy and his Slaver", a bit of stylistic experimentation, or "And Sometimes the Fear", the second part in what I call the Memory Palaces trilogy that started with this piece. At some point I may write an additional story about Hona, called "Hona is Three". Any Harlan Ellison fans who pick up on that one get bonus points. Smile

Faatina Lebass
Posted - 2008.01.29 11:49:00 - [14]
 

I always knew Draea was the "good-guy" despite Nale being the protagonist. Sometimes, one's view of things can become so vast that the narrower truths can be lost, and it takes someone as single minded as Draea focusing solely on such a truth to keep a mad prophet from damning the world.
I especially enjoyed the use of the word Armageddon (destruction of the world) over Apocalypse (end of times), as it has that vast, world-ending feel, but is not so vast as to mean the end of all things (just of all things for those poor *******s on the station).
I think my only real gripe about the entire series is Mr. Abraxas succumbing to the degradation of the English language via using 'They' and 'Them' as gender neuter singular pronouns, when in fact they are gender neuter plural pronouns. But hey, that's political correctness and general idiocy destroying a language (I can barely speak), and is no fault of Mr. Abraxas.
Incredibly awesome story!
I look forward to reading other works by you, Sirah!
(If I ever become a teacher, I vow to fail any article of work, no matter the merit, should I find this flaw therein. Come on, it's English, there're over 2 million words to choose from!)

Ramblin Man
Empyreum
Posted - 2008.01.29 14:53:00 - [15]
 

So I take it that this means the Society has gone through a purge, post-Book reconstruction, and some new Jovians are calling the shots now? Unless Atira was really working for the SoE counter-revolution somehow? Latter theory would be buttressed by the fact that she was initially doing the job for money and a clean record, and then things just 'worked out' so that she decided to sacrifice her life to keep Nale from the book. Sounds more like SoE than Society, tbh.

Also, how did Hona survive? The last mention puts her in the same room, with a knife in one leg, at most a half an hour or so before the station goes *BOOM*. I don't think I'm going out on a limb here by being surprised that she's still alive afterwards Wink. What, she happened to find cloning tech in the room or something Razz? Not that I'm disappointed, mind you -- she was Atira, gone down a different path.

Finally, when was Nale damned, in your opinion? I'll admit I completely missed the foreshadowing on Atira's narrative arc in the prologue (nice job there, btw), but Nale seems as though he could have gone either way. Initial contact with the first sphere? Black Mountain epiphany (which I guess would be the Book)? Ultimate rejection of human fellowship?

Godani Lifetrey
Gallente
Center for Advanced Studies
Posted - 2008.01.29 16:36:00 - [16]
 

Originally by: Faatina Lebass
I always knew Draea was the "good-guy"


I find it funny to notice that people see Nale as mad, and Draea as good. I agree that were I to live in that universe, I would be thanking Draea for that act, yet to see her as the "good" one goes way beyond it for me. They are both just parts of pattern, te champions of their niche. And they are linked.

It is really great how the symbolism of our DNA, the spiral way in which they sink to the bottom of the slime, supports the fact they are the same coin seen from two sides. Actions disregarding, they have each their own complementary view on the world. One is hyperfocussed, a narrow beam, one is broader than the horizon. These two ways of looking at the universe are beautifully mixed in normal persons, just like good and evil, positive and negative, altruistic and selfish, etc.

They are the two archetypes of normal humans, each having found the mastery over their own weakness that matches the others strenght (Nale's weakness in the start: dodging, Draea's weakness: her relying on her aim (Alad tells her so). Also Nale dodges whatever Draea throws, and throwing happens to be Draea's strenght.).

It seems Draea still had the ability to change, while Nale became almost machinelike. Draea let go of her strenght, and, thanks to Alad, found a new way to deal with the threat (Nale). One wonders what would have happened if Nale had accepted his weakness in his strenght, and if he had thought deeper, like Hona warned him. He was almst there, accepting his third death, but he lost his connection with things, focussing on Draea, who widened up and got a spine.

Truly a majestically woven carpet. For in yet another way they complment each other: Nale doing good right up till the end, and Draea doingbad right up tillthe end. So it goes: Balance in all things, the golden mean.

It all reminds me a lot of universal balance, or maybe even karma: the net energy of the universe equals zero and creation oflife had to bring death, etc.

Again, I love it Abraxas, thanks for a wonderfull read!

Freyya
Advanced Planetary Exports
Intergalactic Exports Group
Posted - 2008.01.30 09:10:00 - [17]
 

Edited by: Freyya on 30/01/2008 13:08:06
Edited by: Freyya on 30/01/2008 09:15:17
Excellent read once more, couldn't have described the feeling i got from this piece any better than the posters above me..epic in every sense of the word.

One thing i'm wondering though, and i wonder if i'm the only one wondering (gee, lot's of wondering going on here), is where Hona comes from..
In A pleasant surprise we see Nale and his complete team board the station, only to walk into a trap which throws them all to the floor unconcious. In Polymelia we see Nale saying Monas is gone and Zetyn was the only one he could save, no mention of Hona.
Why did Zetyn not ask about Hona when he was saved from the skinnermaze in the first place?

Did Hona get transported to another section of the station by Polok to practise his hobbies? But then again, Draea should know what happened with her companions when she saw Nale and Hona standing there, but she shows no signs of knowledge about their fate. The fact that Nale was alive and well gives Draea the message that Krezek failed and died either way, since he was taking care of both Nale and Zetyn. Unless Nale was left to wander the station after regaining conciousness, which to me seems very unlikely.

Eventhough Hona's adventures before reaching the warehouse with Nale might be explained in the upcomming installments, these little inconcistancies left me feeling like i missed a part of the story.
At the least it takes a massive dump on the chronological timeline since Hona is most likely not alive anymore to ponder about her adventures with Polok (If he's the one that was taking care of Hona) with which you could do a flashback after this installment...if Hona was still alive that is..

Maybe i'm just thinking about it too much.

Edit: reread the first couple of lines of the story and found i missed a small emotional flinch, as Draea said hobby, Hona drew her gun slowly...indicating the word hobby made her angry and wanted to kill Draea for naming it that. Gives a pointer that Polok indeed performed his hobby on Hona.

Ghost Goat
Posted - 2008.01.31 21:45:00 - [18]
 

so wait.... is there any connection between the super nova like explosion
and the bright star we see every system in eve , or its just coincidence ?

Freyya
Advanced Planetary Exports
Intergalactic Exports Group
Posted - 2008.01.31 22:02:00 - [19]
 

Most likely purely coincidence, the star was already explained in 4 short stories published elsewhere (have been linked in the front page news section)
Besides, A supernova like explosion won't be registered for as long as it has in game ;) such a happening might be seen for a couple days but after that all the light emanating from such an explosion would have passed long since.

Terenius Neo
Posted - 2008.02.10 16:31:00 - [20]
 

Quote:
Most likely purely coincidence, the star was already explained in 4 short stories published elsewhere (have been linked in the front page news section)


What are the names of this storys? I thought that star had something to do with christmas. (I know, stupid.) That was the time I recognized it the first time.


 

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