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CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2007.09.10 15:50:00 - [1]
 

Edited by: CCP Abraxas on 10/09/2007 16:34:03
Welcome to the second instalment of Black Mountain.

This time around, we get to meet BM's other main character, a man known as Nale. We first saw this individual in a prologue-ish chronicle called "The Greatest Joke", and while that chronicle isn't immediately vital to your enjoyment of Black Mountain, I strongly suggest you do read it.

Speaking of older stories, two more points:

First, I've been away for a week and was unable to reply to messages in the thread for On This Earth. If you have any questions or comments on that story that you'd still like discussed, post them here.

Second, those of you whose sensibilities were offended by the violent art of On This Earth will be relieved to hear that this time, the only things being shot at anyone's head are rubber balls. The rubber balls hurt, as you can see by the crouching form in the picture's foreground, but they are still only rubber balls. Pay attention to those rubber balls, for they will be of more importance than you generally might imagine rubber balls to have. In Black Mountain, many things have vast and terrible meanings. Even rubber balls.

Shadow Ballet
Gallente
Trillionaire High-Rollers Suicidal Bassoon Orkesta
Posted - 2007.09.10 15:54:00 - [2]
 

No sooner do I request than here it is, yeah! Reading now...

Ki Tarra
Ki Tech Industries
Posted - 2007.09.10 16:38:00 - [3]
 

Interesting, most interesting.

Now was he ever dieing or was that just a recruitment tactic? Shocked

And as you hinted about in earlier commentary: who is doing good for the wrong reasons and who is doing wrong for good reasons.

You need to start releasing this stuff a little earlier, I want it ready to go when I get in to work on Monday morning. Laughing

Zalathar
Minmatar
Trannyz
Posted - 2007.09.10 19:10:00 - [4]
 

excellent, and very interesting.

Pang Grohl
Posted - 2007.09.10 19:43:00 - [5]
 

Where have we seen this mystery tech before? I remember there being a chronicle about the Jove poking around in some pilot's brain. Oh well, I guess I can wait for the next installment for more details.

Victor Valka
Caldari
The Kairos Syndicate
Transmission Lost
Posted - 2007.09.10 19:56:00 - [6]
 

/orgasm

Ki Tarra
Ki Tech Industries
Posted - 2007.09.10 20:24:00 - [7]
 

Originally by: Pang Grohl
Where have we seen this mystery tech before? I remember there being a chronicle about the Jove poking around in some pilot's brain.
Are you refering to this chronicle?

Jericho Dark
Calpolli
Namtz' aar K'in
Posted - 2007.09.11 12:26:00 - [8]
 

Ooo...a man with nothing to lose, gains enormous fortune and abilities...


Being lied too, but growing stronger because of it...

Sounds like something I'm going through.Cool I think Nale is going to be my new Hero.

Which I have to ask, how do you get inspiration to write about these characters? Do you try to find a character that no one has created before, rely on past personal experiences, or do your perform a Disney and just play darts at different literature sections?

Typhado3
Minmatar
Posted - 2007.09.11 12:57:00 - [9]
 

Great work... getting more and more interesting. I spent about half an hour downloading other short stories to try and refresh my memory and try to work out different possible outcomes for this story. though I think it's gonna be something new altogether.

keep em coming, I'm looking forward to them.

Haradgrim
Systematic Mercantilism
Posted - 2007.09.11 16:15:00 - [10]
 

This chronicle delivers, however, anyone else sensing a slight similarity to the movie "Joe and the Volcano"?

wiggyman
Caldari
Gallentean Industry Syndicate
Posted - 2007.09.11 20:41:00 - [11]
 

Execellent story, can't wait for the last part!

This rogue missing Jovian technology...
It wouldn't happen to from the same set of weapons as my "Salvaged" 400 Giga Watt subwoofer with brown noise generator? Wink

Hamish Grayson
Caldari Independent Navy Reserve
Posted - 2007.09.12 00:32:00 - [12]
 

The chron is nice but I have a particular pet peeve about the word caldarian
Quote:
closer to Caldarian angles


it should be "closer to caldari angles." Kind of like Swiss watches and not Swissian watches.


Fellonie
Posted - 2007.09.12 13:04:00 - [13]
 

sooooo if you can make this into a 300 page book i will buy a copy.. ok?Very Happy

* two thumbs up *

CaldariAdam
Posted - 2007.09.12 23:56:00 - [14]
 

Edited by: CaldariAdam on 12/09/2007 23:56:31
I'm not done yet but I like this part,
Quote:
"Well, you're the first one we didn't have to carry in here on a stretcher. You're amazingly relaxed."

"Comes with death," he said.

The monitor gave him a funny look, then said. "Tests are over. After you've cleaned up, ops people want to talk to you." The monitor looked at the screen showing Nale's vitals and said, "Now his adrenaline rises. You're a strange, strange man, Nale."
He sounds like me.

Franga
NQX Innovations
Posted - 2007.09.14 11:14:00 - [15]
 

Originally by: CaldariAdam
Edited by: CaldariAdam on 12/09/2007 23:56:31
I'm not done yet but I like this part,
Quote:
"Well, you're the first one we didn't have to carry in here on a stretcher. You're amazingly relaxed."

"Comes with death," he said.

The monitor gave him a funny look, then said. "Tests are over. After you've cleaned up, ops people want to talk to you." The monitor looked at the screen showing Nale's vitals and said, "Now his adrenaline rises. You're a strange, strange man, Nale."
He sounds like me.


Way to compliment yourself.

Abraxas - I love you and may very well have to have your children. "Always leave them wanting more" - you would have to be the strictest adherent to this maxim that I know of. It's liking reading something Peter F. Hamilton wrote about EVE.

Mind you - if I wish, I can read everything of his seeing as it's in a book and not fed to me via small portions ... but still.

aquontium
Gallente
Fourth Circle
Posted - 2007.09.14 18:05:00 - [16]
 

gotta say, first story set the scene much better, far more immersive and polished. This Nale story reads more like a 'you choose the story' Dungeons and Dragons book! At least, with the introduction of this character, there's room in the story for a nalegun...

CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2007.09.17 23:02:00 - [17]
 

Edited by: CCP Abraxas on 18/09/2007 15:22:16
Originally by: Ki Tarra
Now was he ever dieing or was that just a recruitment tactic? Shocked

Excellent question, that. Maybe we'll find out in the fullness of time.

Originally by: Jericho Dark
Sounds like something I'm going through.Cool I think Nale is going to be my new Hero.
Which I have to ask, how do you get inspiration to write about these characters?
Depends on the story. For BM, Nale and Draea are the two major sides of my own personality, put under the blazing glare of a magnifying glass.
Almost all my stories begin either as some real-life event or person that I want to investigate in a fictional setting, or as an image or piece of dialogue or that I can't let go of. Examples of the former include The History of Flight, which is almost all true, and The Shrinking Skin, which is based on someone I knew and his attitude towards life; examples of the latter are things like Summer Breeze, which began life only as that "Eighty two," scene, and Terms, where all I had at the start was the two main characters sitting face to face in a starkly lit room, trying to solve their unsolvable problem.

And we'll check back on that Hero thing at the end of BM. Twisted Evil

Originally by: aquontium
This Nale story reads more like a 'you choose the story' Dungeons and Dragons book!
What, "You're put in a gyroscope. Go to page 82 if you vomit, page 145 if your bowels give out"? Very Happy

Keep in mind that these are chapters in a larger story. They are each structured as an individual piece, which was quite a challenge at times, but since they have to be sequential, they won't always have the same buildup and resolution as the stand-alone chronicles do.

Originally by: Franga
Abraxas - I love you and may very well have to have your children.
My girlfriend has her own opinions on that, but I'm sure we can come to some brief and drunken arrangement in a dark alley during the Fan Fest.

Jericho Dark
Calpolli
Namtz' aar K'in
Posted - 2007.09.19 02:01:00 - [18]
 

Edited by: Jericho Dark on 19/09/2007 02:08:15
Originally by: CCP Abraxas
Edited by: CCP Abraxas on 18/09/2007 15:22:16
Originally by: Jericho Dark
Sounds like something I'm going through.Cool I think Nale is going to be my new Hero.
Which I have to ask, how do you get inspiration to write about these characters?
Depends on the story. For BM, Nale and Draea are the two major sides of my own personality, put under the blazing glare of a magnifying glass.
Almost all my stories begin either as some real-life event or person that I want to investigate in a fictional setting, or as an image or piece of dialogue or that I can't let go of. Examples of the former include The History of Flight, which is almost all true, and The Shrinking Skin, which is based on someone I knew and his attitude towards life; examples of the latter are things like Summer Breeze, which began life only as that "Eighty two," scene, and Terms, where all I had at the start was the two main characters sitting face to face in a starkly lit room, trying to solve their unsolvable problem.

And we'll check back on that Hero thing at the end of BM. Twisted Evil



I thought "The History of Flight" had a little bit more heart then the rest Smile That just changed my whole perspective on how human beings(Or other creatures) are portrayed in fiction. I always thought about using my own experiences and exploring them in another sitting, somewhere the kind of stuff a person goes through here is 10x worse or is a normal circumstance somewhere else.

You must get this a lot, but it only helps to say that it is true. You certainly know how to use your talent in story-telling to some great use. Keep on typing those suckers up. Now if there was only a story that involved Stealth Ships and 'Ghost' Ships...YARRRR!!

ANd "Eighty-Two"...Wow. Just... I want to say something wrong, but just that knowledge alone is enough...

I guarantee that Nale will still be considered a Hero in some way. He'll make a mistake, but that is only because he is human... or a Sasha-Hybrid Cyborg Commando. Then that'll be messed up.

Nidhoggr
Gallente
Federal Defence Union
Posted - 2007.10.16 13:23:00 - [19]
 

Originally by: CCP Abraxas
...but I'm sure we can come to some brief and drunken arrangement in a dark alley during the Fan Fest.


Lolz, hope this is not a "black mountain" thing you have going (read black ..uhm, thingy)



 

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