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CCP Fallout

Posted - 2010.03.22 16:41:00 - [1]
 

There are secrets one can keep from others, but one can never keep secrets hidden from one's maker. What secret does Perlan, an acolyte, hold close to his heart in the fields and mines of an Amarr colony?

"Merely Disassembled" is a new EVE Chronicle written by CCP Abraxas.

Mashie Saldana
Minmatar
Veto Corp
Posted - 2010.03.22 16:43:00 - [2]
 

Nice, reading now.

Casiella Truza
Ecliptic Rift
Posted - 2010.03.22 17:20:00 - [3]
 

A few minor nitpicks: his Gallente conversation companion introduces herself as "Crea," and references her by that name several times. However, the end of the story calls her "Drea".

She also calls herself "fortright", but I believe that should read "forthright".

Just after that, a secondary clause lacks a verb: "He'd heard of the profession, although it was rare for the colony to agents of any stripe."

As he returns from the mine, he sees something in "the conversation.area." The spurious period should have a space there instead.

Copyediting aside, I really enjoyed this. The sparseness of the language sets the proper tone for the sort of quiet, meditative setting in the story itself. The torture scene says much more by what it does not say than by what it does. This method to describing violence and sex does far more than graphic description, and I always appreciate that approach when handled skillfully.

I particularly appreciated the penultimate line, "There is a mindset where you achieve quiet and tranquility not by accepting things the way they are, but accepting that they are the way they are."

CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2010.03.22 17:43:00 - [4]
 

Originally by: Casiella Truza
Abraxas needs to learn how to spell


Will get fixed, thanks. Also, this chronicle riffs off a chapter in the upcoming novel. When you read it, the chron will likely feel a little different, though the basic message remains the same.

Zeede Qinhua
Posted - 2010.03.22 18:08:00 - [5]
 

When is the new book expected to hit stores? I really enjoyed The Empyrean Age, and look forward to the next one!

Zeede

Seriphyn Inhonores
Gallente
Eleutherian Guard
Posted - 2010.03.22 19:19:00 - [6]
 

Originally by: Zeede Qinhua
When is the new book expected to hit stores? I really enjoyed The Empyrean Age, and look forward to the next one!

Zeede


It's already out, oddly enough. While the release date for the paperback was 1 March, and the release of hardcover was 25 March, it came out on Amazon UK a few days ago. Very strange, total unceremonious...

Casiella Truza
Ecliptic Rift
Posted - 2010.03.22 19:34:00 - [7]
 

Originally by: CCP Abraxas
Originally by: Casiella Truza
Abraxas needs to learn how to spell


Will get fixed, thanks. Also, this chronicle riffs off a chapter in the upcoming novel. When you read it, the chron will likely feel a little different, though the basic message remains the same.


Hey, I was much nicer than that! Razz But thanks for the fixes. Consider me a long-time core member of your fanbase. Very Happy

Expron
The Hunt
Posted - 2010.03.22 19:51:00 - [8]
 

Must say I enjoy the chronicles, now with all the talk of the novels im going to break down and order them online. I know there is the Empyrean Age and Burning Life, but are there any others?

Forum Anonymity
Minmatar
Posted - 2010.03.22 20:22:00 - [9]
 

Quote:
There is a mindset where you achieve quiet and tranquility not by accepting things the way they are, but accepting that they are the way they are.


Beautiful. Nice chronicle.

Azura Noctis
Amarr
SWARTA
Posted - 2010.03.22 20:36:00 - [10]
 

Edited by: Azura Noctis on 22/03/2010 20:36:40
Looking forward to the novel and other continued writings.

Jonathan Mcarthur
Caldari
Stargazer Exploration Company
Sundiver Technology Diversified
Posted - 2010.03.23 00:26:00 - [11]
 

Excellent story, but... I get the feeling for some reason, he's gay....

Anyway, I hope to see that the Novel might come out soon,

Pahrain
Posted - 2010.03.23 01:18:00 - [12]
 

Originally by: Jonathan Mcarthur
Excellent story, but... I get the feeling for some reason, he's gay....

Anyway, I hope to see that the Novel might come out soon,


Given the overtly religious nature of day-to-day Amarran life, that could very well be the case. They seem like the kind of culture that would repress as much as they possibly could.

Emperor Lykkos
Posted - 2010.03.23 02:58:00 - [13]
 

I liked the story, but I have one question why are they still mining by hand in the distant future? It does give the mines a distinct feel of misery and pain, but it would seem incredibly outdated.

Crying Reaper
Gallente
Tiny Fleet
Posted - 2010.03.23 06:22:00 - [14]
 

Very nice read indeed. Can't wait for my copy of the new book to arrive from amazon.


And Emperor Lykkos it is possible they could be in a communal setting where they limit use of modern technology. But then again they could be just living up to the Amarr sterotypes and using the slaves cuz they have them.

Mithfindel
Zenko Incorporated
Posted - 2010.03.23 09:04:00 - [15]
 

While the labour is clearly manual, it doesn't mean that they couldn't have advanced tools. For example, in the fields they still appear to use scythes, but it's a high tech scythe, and so on. And yes, it appears that the purpose of the colony is manual labour. Partially for the rich as a kind of an "experience", though slaves are kept on the side, either for a similar form of "attaining spiritual enlightment" or just to keep things more profitable.

CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2010.03.23 10:08:00 - [16]
 

Edited by: CCP Abraxas on 23/03/2010 10:07:59
Originally by: Pahrain
Originally by: Jonathan Mcarthur
Excellent story, but... I get the feeling for some reason, he's gay....
Given the overtly religious nature of day-to-day Amarran life, that could very well be the case.

It is. Smile That fact, hidden as it is, is the cornerstone of the entire story.

CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2010.03.23 10:11:00 - [17]
 

Originally by: Emperor Lykkos
I liked the story, but I have one question why are they still mining by hand in the distant future? It does give the mines a distinct feel of misery and pain, but it would seem incredibly outdated.

One of the basic assumptions about New Eden is that not everyone has access to (or has developed to) the same level of tech. There are varying reasons for this. Some planets may not have the resources necessary to develop or maintain hi-tech equipment when low-tech would do; some planets may not have the money necessary to purchase the equipment in the first place; and some may simply be so far down the rung of the evolutionary technological ladder that they have no idea this stuff exists.

And as you said, in this case it gives the mines a distinct feel of misery and pain. You would not want to be there if you could help it, and you certainly would not want your children to be raised there. The novel goes to some lengths in explaining why this is the case and what the inhabitants are expected to do about it.

Andreus LeHane
Gallente
Mixed Metaphor
Posted - 2010.03.23 13:59:00 - [18]
 

Originally by: CCP Abraxas
Edited by: CCP Abraxas on 23/03/2010 10:07:59
Originally by: Pahrain
Originally by: Jonathan Mcarthur
Excellent story, but... I get the feeling for some reason, he's gay....
Given the overtly religious nature of day-to-day Amarran life, that could very well be the case.

It is. Smile That fact, hidden as it is, is the cornerstone of the entire story.


I approve of this.

Marrott Valence
Axitek Consortium
Posted - 2010.03.23 18:53:00 - [19]
 

Really enjoyed this. Looking forward to the book!

TheLostPenguin
Posted - 2010.03.23 19:27:00 - [20]
 

Another good story, really liked this and the last chronicle having just read both today, can't say if its a change in the chron's or just where I'm at right now but both made for a nice read.
Keep them coming, more like these please Very Happy

Katrina Bekers
Gallente
Fighters Squadron
Posted - 2010.03.24 00:09:00 - [21]
 

Very nice chronicle. I'd call it introspective just enough to be believably amarrian in nature.

A bit saddened that we gallente women are invariably painted as borderline between psychotic and nymphomaniacal. Oh well, at times it's useful for the lesser races to believe that. See the mercenary story for a good reason why. Wink

Kel Kun
Posted - 2010.03.24 09:45:00 - [22]
 

This man surely had infinite compassion.

This man surely knew his limits.

This man was surely counscious that the goodness his simple compassion gives is the best thing to be done in the universe.

And also, this man probably had a good idea that this kind of action leads straight to Heaven. Or illumination, however you call it.

And many other things I'll keep for myself

Julian Darklight
Posted - 2010.03.24 14:52:00 - [23]
 

Edited by: Julian Darklight on 24/03/2010 14:52:48
Edited by: Julian Darklight on 24/03/2010 14:52:27
Excellent story. the torture scene captured the first contact with extreem violence an general human nature flawlessly. some will hate it, some will not care, an some will love it. none of those responses are wrong and all are necessary.

As far as the gay part goes, a total normality. many hyper religious folks have odd sexual tendencies. no surpeise there but i admired the writin an tactful handling.

Kel Kun
Posted - 2010.03.24 18:06:00 - [24]
 

I'm not sure there is a gay part in this chronicle, at least i didnt get it lol. It is common practice in religious communities to say that compassion is another kind of love. Nothing sexual in it. Well I do believe in this principle and I'm assuming a true Amarr would too.

As it has been already said, it could be used to hide wicked sexual practice, religions always had a problem with sex.


Jonathan Mcarthur
Caldari
Stargazer Exploration Company
Sundiver Technology Diversified
Posted - 2010.03.25 00:45:00 - [25]
 

Originally by: CCP Abraxas
Edited by: CCP Abraxas on 23/03/2010 10:07:59
Originally by: Pahrain
Originally by: Jonathan Mcarthur
Excellent story, but... I get the feeling for some reason, he's gay....
Given the overtly religious nature of day-to-day Amarran life, that could very well be the case.

It is. Smile That fact, hidden as it is, is the cornerstone of the entire story.


I guess my gay vibe sensing abilities haven't faded away, ty for the answer.

Lusulpher
Gallente
Posted - 2010.03.25 04:26:00 - [26]
 

Edited by: Lusulpher on 25/03/2010 04:29:10
Originally by: Jonathan Mcarthur
Excellent story, but... I get the feeling for some reason, he's gay....

...hope to see that the Novel might come out soon,


Yeah, reminded me of the Museum Electric chron. The calm is a nice change. And the implied romance is pretty intense here, \spoiler\ even though nothing happened. \spoiler\ That's good imagery.

Few more typos remain...Abraxas can't spell for crap.[oh wait not English, lol] At least I learned a new word. Vagaries. Very subtle sexual metaphor?Surprised

edit: They got fixed. Just reread.


New novel? Go on.

Kel Kun
Posted - 2010.03.25 05:08:00 - [27]
 

Well, I assume that "monk" is mixing a couple things together that dosen't really have to be joined together...

lol

well that may be a proof that gayness dosen't lead straight to hell. Despite the compassion I have for all that lives, my sexual desires goes for females.

Just wanted to make things clear :P

Dr Amira
Caldari
Science and Trade Institute
Posted - 2010.03.25 07:43:00 - [28]
 

Another excellent chron that fits in nicely with the new novel. Also, I have to recommend the novel to anyone here who hasn't ordered it yet, a fantastic read with a nicely hidden twist at the end that has become one of Abraxas' trademark features, although it helps if you are familiar with his other work (most of the chronicles, especially the black mountain series) before reading it.

I always love the way Abraxas tries to focus on the EVE universe as a whole, rather than just the tiny portion of it that is capsuleer life, it adds a lot of depth to the universe. Too many other games keep the backstory focussed on the players and view this sort of non gameplay-oriented storytelling as a waste of resources, but its rich background is yet another feature of EVE that I love.

Elrianmk2
Gallente
Posted - 2010.03.25 09:48:00 - [29]
 

Agreed with the good Dr, very nicely linked in with the book, and prefered this novel to the [explitive] fixer in the first novel. Nicely done gents, very nicely done

Manterror
Posted - 2010.03.25 11:50:00 - [30]
 

"He found a tall tree, sturdy tree with heavily..."

supposed to be...

He found a tall, sturdy tree with heavily..."

?


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