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CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2009.10.05 16:15:00 - [1]
 

This time around we have a horror story for you, about what happens when you sign up on a ship that may take you to places you really wouldn't want to visit.

This is a new entry in our chronicle series, published on Mondays every other week.

Destination SkillQueue
Are We There Yet
Posted - 2009.10.05 16:34:00 - [2]
 

Edited by: Destination SkillQueue on 05/10/2009 16:43:01
First...to congratulate you on another wonderful story. Also "She started to do things". Things? Wink

EDIT: Could you find an acceptably modest alternative way to say what you mean instead of saying "When they did it" or "She started to do things". Most words describing "it" and "things" are actually very beautiful and non-offensive. Using "things" and "it" seems sort of juvenile and doesn't really fit.

Casiella Truza
Ecliptic Rift
Posted - 2009.10.05 17:30:00 - [3]
 

The phrase "When they did it" does stick out as, well, artless, in substantial contrast to the rest of the story. And not in a meta way, as in reflecting awkwardness in their relationship and intimacy.

The only other thing I'd note is that the phrase "he did really not want to see his face" seems to have "really" and "did" transposed.

Stylistic issues aside, I found this story interestingly creepy. Over time, they all take on the capsuleer's face? Do the faces in fact change, or does Lazar actually suffer from prosopagnosia? Does Lazar's face change at the end as well? (Not that I am asking CCP Abraxas to answer, as he almost certainly left it unclear on purpose).

I stand firmly in the "CCP Abraxas Fan Club" crowd, in part because I'm never quite sure what's happening...

Alex Kriminov
Caldari
EVE University
Ivy League
Posted - 2009.10.05 18:54:00 - [4]
 

Another very good story!

Only other comment would be to agree that you could have come up with something better than "she started to do things" without being overtly sexual or inappropriate. Than again, this may have been the style you were looking for with this piece.

One of the reasons I really like your work -- always keeps me guessing. Well done!

Lolion Reglo
Caldari Provisions
Posted - 2009.10.05 18:56:00 - [5]
 

Beautiful and unnervingly creepy story. I loved how you set to mood and aside from what the others say about the "doing it" part it all flowed perfectly. The way i see it is being subject to space altered Lazar's mind that gave him a case of Prosopagnosia. Least that's how i understand how he came about it. Or there is something amiss on that ship that causes such a condition and the crew know of it but wont say it. Maybe the lack of mirrors combined with the long trecks of deep space forces the minds of its inhabitants to project their own face on everyone else to remember it? the obvious lack of razors is to make sure they don't kill themselves or each other of course...lol. but the lack of answers only add to the mystery of it so don't answer these questions...hehe. My only hope is that my character stories can be as good as these...lol.

What i found most intriguing out of all of this was that this chronicle just confirmed or is at least giving credit long standing question of whether ships have crews or not. What i have taken from this is that the ship being an industrial one, has a crew of about 500. /me does a happy dance. If this is the case i thank the writers for this and am glad you kept open an entire storytelling aspect for Eve.

Alexeph Stoekai
Stoekai Corp
Posted - 2009.10.05 19:01:00 - [6]
 

Edited by: Alexeph Stoekai on 05/10/2009 19:05:14
Lovely, but strange. A bit more cohesive than some of your recent work, but at the same time stranger.

Would love to know what is going on.

EDIT:
Originally by: Lolion Reglo

What i found most intriguing out of all of this was that this chronicle just confirmed or is at least giving credit long standing question of whether ships have crews or not.
CCP has always made it clear that our ships have crews. There is no questioning it. The point that an industrial has 500 people is fresh info though. It's also an industrial that makes forays into low-sec and has weapons mounted, so I'm thinking that it's a blockade runner.

CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2009.10.05 19:15:00 - [7]
 

Originally by: Destination SkillQueue
Edited by: Destination SkillQueue on 05/10/2009 16:43:01Most words describing "it" and "things" are actually very beautiful and non-offensive.
Oh, absolutely. That's why I didn't choose them. Smile

As people have remarked, this is one of those chrons open to several interpretations. However, I did have a definite story in mind when I wrote it (this is vital whenever writing an open-ended piece, lest it just turn into meaningless sludge) and at the end of that story we observe two facts:

Lazar has become so disconnected from his own body that events which otherwise would have been meaningful and personal to him, he now treats like ephemera...

...and Reanie may, in fact, have been spending all this time with Lazar at the request of a third party - to ease him in, you might say - which means that what she's performing in that final scene, even if she truly likes our man, is a service; and that kind of service requires a different vocabulary than proper lovemaking would.

It's perfectly fine if people disagree with this. You write, and you let go of what you wrote, because it now belongs to other people whose minds contain voices that sound different than your own. Smile

Incidentally, I just realized that throughout my fiction, this theme of support and betrayal keeps cropping up in various guises. It's a huge part of my novel, too.

Lolion Reglo
Caldari Provisions
Posted - 2009.10.05 19:46:00 - [8]
 

Originally by: CCP Abraxas
Lazar has become so disconnected from his own body that events which otherwise would have been meaningful and personal to him, he now treats like ephemera...

...and Reanie may, in fact, have been spending all this time with Lazar at the request of a third party - to ease him in, you might say - which means that what she's performing in that final scene, even if she truly likes our man, is a service; and that kind of service requires a different vocabulary than proper lovemaking would.

Incidentally, I just realized that throughout my fiction, this theme of support and betrayal keeps cropping up in various guises. It's a huge part of my novel, too.


touche... i missed that she may be providing a service to ease him into the ship. Of course with the way she acts when around him blankly smiling should have been a dead give away.

Cant wait for the novel either. i love reading this games fiction and would love to contribute to it. but first more research needs done...hehe.

Gil Danastre
Amarr
JAF-CO Exploration
Posted - 2009.10.05 20:01:00 - [9]
 

I did find it somewhat odd that he saw others faces as being the capsuleer's face before he'd actually met him. Unless something really weird was going on and everyone was getting a free face transplant? Regardless, nice chronicle.

Also CCP I demand that when Incarna hits, you give us the ability to go onboard our ships and hug crewmemebers to boost their morale. Very Happy

Arnulf Ogunkoya
Minmatar
The Causality
Electus Matari
Posted - 2009.10.05 20:48:00 - [10]
 

Edited by: Arnulf Ogunkoya on 05/10/2009 20:48:14
Here's an idea. As I understand it only capsule tech is restricted to a small group that is compatible with it. Anyone can be cloned, it's just most people can't afford it.

So, what it this particular crazy capsuleer buys his crews cloned bodies, but they are mass market versions without the customisation that pod pilots can afford. A bit like your standard second life toons say. If Lazar can't remember being cloned it's because he has blanked the memory himself, or it's been erased as part of the process.

Of course that could just be too literal a reading of things. Maybe he's just crazier than his pilot.


Flamewave
Crimson Moon Society
Posted - 2009.10.05 21:31:00 - [11]
 

Such a perfectly creepy story for this fine October. Very Happy

Typhonian
Posted - 2009.10.05 22:48:00 - [12]
 

wow thats kinda creepy...making love to a woman who has the face of your male captain....

Sidrat Flush
Caldari
Eve Industrial Corp
Posted - 2009.10.05 23:21:00 - [13]
 

Edited by: Sidrat Flush on 05/10/2009 23:23:50
Hmm, the woman has the same face as our initiate.

This has been one of the best stories ever, for several reasons. Firstly the pod pilot doesn't have to be disenfranchised from the crew and the crew COULD be a human being, although altering their faces seems a bit weird, maybe it's due to the warp speeds or even the gate jumps affecting the bone structure of the unprotected crew.

At least know EVERYONE SHOULD believe that there are real people crewing your ship.

With a crew of 500 I'm thinking of a T1 industrial ship. There was no obvious indication of race.

Could any human being get used to seeing the exact same face with different gaits, builds, tone of voice and personality or does that way lead to running a doll shop and becoming insane?

EDIT: Also I didn't read of a betrayal, maybe he wasn't given all the facts but hey it's up to him to ask for answers in the first place. Sadly he didn't know the questions. Ahh well, such is life at least know he's a crew member on a pod piloted ship.

I really enjoyed writing the fiction about two crew members getting married and retiring on to their own land that I done a year or two back.

Trustworthy Joe
Minmatar
Posted - 2009.10.05 23:25:00 - [14]
 

Originally by: Gil Danastre


Also CCP I demand that when Incarna hits, you give us the ability to go onboard our ships and hug crewmemebers to boost their morale. Very Happy


i would also like to be able to walk around my ship, as both a boost to morale and to look at the poor saps who think they are going to last a year.

they would if insurance lasted that long, but whatever Very Happy

AppleStew
Posted - 2009.10.06 05:36:00 - [15]
 

Edited by: AppleStew on 06/10/2009 05:41:20
Eh so I still don;t get it... why do people's faces keep changing? Is it cos they died and were cloned? As hinted from the fights, yeah he will remember the fight but the indy surviving a single salvo from even a frig is unlikely. Therefore maybe its just that they died and were cloned, but why didn't the clones get a facelift?

Grishax
Posted - 2009.10.06 12:05:00 - [16]
 

Edited by: Grishax on 06/10/2009 12:09:38
Well, very creepy story indeed...

First thing I did after being utterly bewildered, was look up the title on wikipedia. Then it started to make sense, in a way. It is not the rest who is undergoing changes, but Lazar alone.

Also figured out the fact that she was performing a 'service' due to the fact that she was smiling, but not smiling. Lazar does not seem to have any problems with recognising emotions, only faces.

Although it irks me I do not know why this is happening to specificly *this* crew, it is kind of fitting, seeing as scientists as yet still have no idea what's causing it anyway. And people in real life have to learn to live with it the same way Lazar did. They don't have a choice.

<edit>
Tried to look this up, but couldn't find an answer. What does 'to vet his guns' mean? From the context, I guess it means something like 'prepare' or 'bring to bare', but could not find a definitive answer.
</edit>

Hooch Flux
Caldari
Posted - 2009.10.06 12:21:00 - [17]
 

Originally by: AppleStew
Edited by: AppleStew on 06/10/2009 05:41:20
Eh so I still don;t get it... why do people's faces keep changing? Is it cos they died and were cloned? As hinted from the fights, yeah he will remember the fight but the indy surviving a single salvo from even a frig is unlikely. Therefore maybe its just that they died and were cloned, but why didn't the clones get a facelift?


This may help.

Our reality is very dependent on our perception, a good example would be if you ever tried to explain a color to a person who was born blind or a sound to a born deaf person, it's nearly impossible...
My interpretation of this story is that Lazar has acquired this condition (Possibly due to limited isolation) and his mind is creating a face to compensate.
As to the reason why he saw the Capsuleer with the face and saw that it fit, he had never seen the Capsuleer before and so when his mind created the face he had no previous knowledge of his actual appearance therefore leaving him with the impression that the face fit, the only reason that he knew it was the Capsuleer was that he saw the implants.

I liked this story because sometimes the scariest things in life are the ones created with our own minds and I can see how this would drive someone mad!

Alex Kriminov
Caldari
EVE University
Ivy League
Posted - 2009.10.06 13:40:00 - [18]
 

Originally by: CCP Abraxas
Originally by: Destination SkillQueue
"You write, and you let go of what you wrote, because it now belongs to other people whose minds contain voices that sound different than your own."

Very well stated. That's why the book is always better than the movie!

Natalie Mia
Minmatar
Serenity Systems Inc
Posted - 2009.10.06 18:38:00 - [19]
 

This is one of my favorite chronicles yet. I like how you dont ever find out what is really going on with Lazar. The solution could be many different things from space sickness (which we know he gets right after they leave port), hitting his head when the ship is attacked, poisoning (industrial or intentional) or even a mental breakdown we dont know. That is part of what brings life to the story. The others on the ship either do not have this problem or they are imune to it after being onboard for so long.
Reania part of the story also brings in a twist. She appeared to be there as a friend at first some one Lazar could see solace with, but then the relationship became intimate. Was this intamacy forced or was it built on love. I dont think that lasar was in a state of mind any more to make that determination nor did it seem that he cared. again it brings in a twist to his mental breakdown. Very well written Abraxas.

Nat

Arous Drephius
Posted - 2009.10.06 20:13:00 - [20]
 

♥ Abraxas

Sun'Tzu Yin
Gallente
Wreckage Reclamation Enforcement Consortium
Gentlemen's Interstellar Nightclub
Posted - 2009.10.06 21:01:00 - [21]
 

At the least the pilot could have cultivated a more aesthetically pleasing face for his crew...like mine.

WTS: Hot Likeness 2.6, cheap!

Fohacidal
SPORADIC MOVEMENT
Posted - 2009.10.06 22:15:00 - [22]
 

Hooray a capsuleer who isnt a douche!

Azrakadar
Minmatar
The Nietzsche Followers
Shades of Gray
Posted - 2009.10.06 23:22:00 - [23]
 

Edited by: Azrakadar on 06/10/2009 23:23:15
I am new to EVE (been playing for a month), and this is the first Chronicle that grasped me in a way that I just had to read the whole thing (to be fair, before this one, I only tried Silent Auction) -- probably some attention deficit on my part :P

I have to say, though, this was a very interesting read! It feels a bit like the book 1984:P

From now on I'll devote more time and attention to EVE chronicles!

Kaya Divine
Gallente
Kittens Factory
Posted - 2009.10.07 01:23:00 - [24]
 

Its nice read, but its not horror. It reminds me on Twilight Zone.



Herzog Wolfhammer
Gallente
Sigma Special Tactics Group
Posted - 2009.10.07 05:00:00 - [25]
 

These ships have crews?

Just kidding.

Wen Jaibao
Aperture Harmonics
Posted - 2009.10.07 05:41:00 - [26]
 

Is this our Halloween chronicle? Well done Cool

Hoinus
Gallente
Duty Free Exchange
Posted - 2009.10.07 05:53:00 - [27]
 

I don't get it so he has Prosopagnosia and can't recognize face? But then why would those people answer him like it was really true that their face changed? I mean if someone I know one day went who are you? I'll respond more like your kidding right?

Gnulpie
Minmatar
Miner Tech
Posted - 2009.10.07 08:13:00 - [28]
 

"He had just been comforted by a capsuleer. He felt like an infant, rocked to sleep by a burning red sun."

I simply LOVE that line. Very powerful but very gentle at the same time.

A good story.

Nishachara
True Enlightenment
Posted - 2009.10.07 12:52:00 - [29]
 

A very good story imao...kinda creepy and dark but it does not tell you much, it lets your imagination to tell you the rest (i like that kind of stories, writer H.P Lovecraft is good in that :D ) and leaves a lot of questions...thats good :D

Apart from the darker creepy nature this story makes me wonder about the crew of my ship ...
I mean from moral point of view crews of all our ships are like things...slaves...expendables...
Just imagine how your ship would look from inside when you only get a minor hull breach...
No wonder they could go crazy...I am, for example, almost 5 months in a wh ...imagine the mental state of crews in that ships...
Alone, detached from normal space, no even subspace communications, only dark old spooky sleeper/talocan structures and bizzare sleeper drones...

Lysit Kaune
Minmatar
Band Of Bonkers
Posted - 2009.10.07 12:56:00 - [30]
 

Whilst a good Chronicle, it left me with the same thought Spectral did, "What did this have to do with Eve?". It could have been written of any setting, and doesn't really add to the back story.


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