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CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2009.08.12 14:23:00 - [1]
 

And here now, a little late, is a dark story about a darker story, and about a man who desperately tells himself stories. And possibly a dog, or not.

This is a new entry in our chronicle series, (usually) published on Monday every other week.

The7SensE
Amarr
Ministry of War
Posted - 2009.08.12 14:44:00 - [2]
 

First.

Also, nice story but it kinda makes you feel weird.

Gnulpie
Minmatar
Miner Tech
Posted - 2009.08.12 15:04:00 - [3]
 

Err ...

And what has that to do with Eve? It could be set into any other environment.

Also that style of storytelling isn't of my liking. I prefer the old-fashioned stories where some actual plot is told in more or less easy enough words and figures. But everyone to their own.


Katrina Bekers
Gallente
Fighters Squadron
Posted - 2009.08.12 15:48:00 - [4]
 

Another work for the Utterly Cryptic(tm) product line. But I liked this one. At least this time only the plot is cryptic, not the actual narration.

Besides, the "Scene.start(3357);" typo is just lovely. Cool

And a nice jab to all the peons thinking that in 44'000-odd AD we won't still be using command line interfaces! Shell rules! Wink

Ivena Amethyst
Posted - 2009.08.12 16:02:00 - [5]
 

"He's a capsuleer, flying free, unfettered and undoubted, heading towards the stars."
...

CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2009.08.12 16:15:00 - [6]
 

Originally by: Katrina Bekers
Another work for the Utterly Cryptic(tm) product line. But I liked this one. At least this time only the plot is cryptic, not the actual narration.

Besides, the "Scene.start(3357);" typo is just lovely. Cool

And a nice jab to all the peons thinking that in 44'000-odd AD we won't still be using command line interfaces! Shell rules! Wink


The plot is actually pretty straightforward; it's just all in flashback. The guy did some bad things, and he's reimagining them...

... and yes, CLIs FTW Cool


Seriphyn Inhonores
Gallente
Eleutherian Guard
Posted - 2009.08.12 17:08:00 - [7]
 

So, these are what pleasure hubs are then?

Casiella Truza
Ecliptic Rift
Posted - 2009.08.12 17:34:00 - [8]
 

So maybe the EVE World Design Contest could end up vaguely resembling something in here somehow...

Another cryptic story, very different from the last one. Need to chew on it a bit longer.

Ankhesentapemkah
Gallente
Posted - 2009.08.12 17:42:00 - [9]
 

If computers are still programmed like that in the future, I'm so going to toss something out of the nearest airlock Evil or Very Mad

Inconsistencies:

Scene.interrupt;Scene.delete(3396);
[->User]Confirm deletion?
Confirm;


Doesn't give any feedback.

Capture.erase;
[->User]Confirm capture?
Confirm;
[->User]Capture erased?


Gives "Capture erased?" as feedback (why the question mark?), but erasing a capture would be less significant than erasing a scene, so why doesn't scene deletion give feedback?

FarOut'FarSpace
Posted - 2009.08.12 18:01:00 - [10]
 

Edited by: FarOut''FarSpace on 12/08/2009 18:16:15

Yeah! :) I would like to set a few things right from my past life and experience it in that virtual world.

Can we our selves do this in game someday? 3D on my computer screen would be fine :)

I like the stories that let me experience down in the depths of the actual EVE society.

I could imagine this one being part of a larger story. The scene change wording that sounded like computer talk was a little hard to follow but I got used to it half way through. It did help to set the mood.

The story of what he was experiencing made sence as it seemed he was looking how his life would be if things were different and then he was a capsuleer and at least we get to already do that, we is lucky there. Thank you for the stories CCP Abraxas. I love reading your stories and imagine living in them, someware...

P.S. Casiella Truza
Thanks for mentioning the EVE World Design Contest that is awesome.

Alexeph Stoekai
Stoekai Corp
Posted - 2009.08.12 18:26:00 - [11]
 

I always thought that neural remapping might have an effect on your personality. I didn't consider that it might be able to influence your personality on purpose.

Something making you depressed? Snip-snip, get out and enjoy the world!

Now, to reel in my intelligence operatives and get their heads scrubbed again.

Equitis
Posted - 2009.08.12 20:48:00 - [12]
 

Poor "dog." So the 3390's are the actual (or what he wishes were actual) flashbacks? And the others scenes tend to involve being able to fix problems or understand people. I get the impression that he wasn't very good at dealing with the important people in his life, and so decided to fix the "problem" in a very bad way. But I don't understand scene 3396 though, specifically the part about messages. Please Explain!

CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2009.08.12 21:40:00 - [13]
 

Originally by: Equitis
But I don't understand scene 3396 though, specifically the part about messages. Please Explain!


Here's a spoiler I wrote earlier for another clever person.

SPOILER
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This self-aggrandizing guy is a little messed up in the head. In real life, he met a young single mother, got to know her, eventually started dating her. The relationship, unfortunately, started to sour. The child annoyed him, while the woman spurned his touch and eventually broke up with him. He didn't like that, so he started keeping watch on her - stalking her - and eventually broke into her apartment.

Where he accidentally woke up the kid. And panicked. So he did something he can never undo.

And now he's hidden himself away in an emulation chamber of sorts, endlessly reliving his own version of the story, recasting those events into fictional situations where he's in the right or where they turn out a little different. Every one of those scenes corresponds to a real event, and the kind of person he plays in those scenes tells you a lot about his emotional attitude towards them.

There was never a dog.

Pulivin Motic
Caldari
Outer Limits Trading Company
Posted - 2009.08.12 22:59:00 - [14]
 

wait so this story isnt a representation of all the choices that we make in EVE its just a crazy guy? Oh and are there any plans for another big story like black mountain?



- PS. The Empyrean Age is a pretty good book

Countessa D'Marko
Fortuna inc.
Posted - 2009.08.12 23:30:00 - [15]
 

Originally by: Pulivin Motic
wait so this story isnt a representation of all the choices that we make in EVE its just a crazy guy?


I'd say that it's not so much a story about the pod-pilots as it is about how the rest of the universe looks at us. In all the preceeding scenarios, something didn't quite sit right with the protaganist, but when his dreams turn towards becoming a godlike pod-pilot, suddenly everything is right in his world.


Casiella Truza
Ecliptic Rift
Posted - 2009.08.12 23:34:00 - [16]
 

Holy cow, I missed the next-to-last scene. That changes everything.

Wow.

Equitis
Posted - 2009.08.13 00:21:00 - [17]
 

Originally by: CCP Abraxas

SPOILER


Aaah, I misread the line about getting his message answered so I didn't see the break-up and stalking aspects.
I quite liked this story. I kept wondering what the point was until I got to the line where the kid is "happy and alive." At which point I thought, "That's a weird thing to say... wait... Abraxas, you're awful!"
When are we going to get a story that's not depressing? It's been a few months, hasn't it?

Typhado3
Minmatar
Posted - 2009.08.13 00:57:00 - [18]
 

was a little confusing at first but after the first hint and noticing how the numbers of a lot where close together I manged to get most of it.

Very confusing but very nice, I liked it.

Casiella Truza
Ecliptic Rift
Posted - 2009.08.13 01:30:00 - [19]
 

Originally by: Equitis
When are we going to get a story that's not depressing? It's been a few months, hasn't it?


(a) This is EVE, bebe.

(b) CCP Abraxas has a heart pumping pure black ink that slowly eats away the inner lining of your soul.

Sidrat Flush
Caldari
Eve Industrial Corp
Posted - 2009.08.13 01:52:00 - [20]
 

I love stories that you can't tell what's real or imagined (up to a point of course), as long as the character believes his senses then we should go along with it - a trip through paranoia lane, without the use of mind altering drugs.

I also like the holodeck (please tell me there's gonna be holodecks in the future) as they will be the last invention on earth and that's when pod technology (or non-spaceship alternative, let alone warp capable, whichever comes first), will be most useful.

Demashon
Posted - 2009.08.13 02:38:00 - [21]
 

Great read. A dreamer, a regular Joe with dreams (which became delusions) of grandeur.

And now he's found something that will let him believe they are true. Well done.






admiraltequila
Posted - 2009.08.13 03:03:00 - [22]
 

i think this could make an incredible movie. especially if it was kept in the eve universe. really enjoyed it thnx Abraxas!

rantuket
Caldari
SPORADIC MOVEMENT
Merciless.
Posted - 2009.08.13 05:35:00 - [23]
 

Interesting read, kind of reminds me of the movie Total Recall.

MrNeefe
Amarr
Posted - 2009.08.13 06:20:00 - [24]
 

this is probably my favorite chronicle. not too cryptic, not too straight forward. like how it ended with him pretending to be a capsuleer... poor planetside person, we're better than u.Twisted Evil

Jane Retail
Posted - 2009.08.13 10:44:00 - [25]
 

Edited by: Jane Retail on 13/08/2009 10:44:40
start.scene(4711)

He's a beautiful green orc.. waiting to date a nighelve...


no wait Very Happy

Zanon Ar'Dhaos
Caldari
Inverted Worlds
Posted - 2009.08.13 11:04:00 - [26]
 

Thought this was barely intelligible and definitely uninteresting junk, sorry. Looking forward to seeing some more actual stories that expand the world and/or have at least vaguely interesting characters in the future.

Etheri Grim
Posted - 2009.08.13 13:22:00 - [27]
 

Originally by: Zanon Ar'Dhaos
Thought this was barely intelligible and definitely uninteresting junk, sorry. Looking forward to seeing some more actual stories that expand the world and/or have at least vaguely interesting characters in the future.

The story isn't at fault, just your lack of understanding. This is a virtual world where this guy can re-live memories as he wishes they were, alter the experience until they're how he likes, and also experience fantastic fictional scenarios. At the end of this story his dream scenario is to be a capsuleer, something we all take for granted. It repeats the point made in multiple other chronicles about the huge divide between normal people and capsuleers, how our lives are considered a dream and our existence god-like.

All together, this story is a nice re-iteration of that idea, reminding us all what we are, and how different we seem to non-capsuleers.

CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2009.08.13 13:28:00 - [28]
 

Originally by: Pulivin Motic
wait so this story isnt a representation of all the choices that we make in EVE its just a crazy guy?
Who says it has to be one or the other?

Originally by: Pulivin Motic
are there any plans for another big story like black mountain?
Well, my first novel is coming out in not too long...


Originally by: Casiella Truza
CCP Abraxas has a heart pumping pure black ink that slowly eats away the inner lining of your soul.
You sound just like my mother. Shocked

La'zarus
Posted - 2009.08.13 13:46:00 - [29]
 

Must say i liked it....interesting Style.
Looking forward to the book!

Scene.interrupt;
Logoff;

Crevo Helion
Minmatar
Lutinari Syndicate
Electus Matari
Posted - 2009.08.13 14:13:00 - [30]
 

Very nice story. Took a couple read throughs to understand, but I like it. Definitely am looking forward to your book coming out!

Also, props to whoever did the artwork on both this chron and the last one. Excellent artwork, and nice little details, that really brings you into the world.


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