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CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2009.05.04 17:07:00 - [1]
 

Edited by: CCP Abraxas on 04/05/2009 17:57:49
And because I love you, here is a long piece on a man's journey through the hallucinogenic insides of an asteroid. Except it may also be a sail through Hades, including all its places and rivers. Or his own mind. Or all the above. While it's not necessary to have read any other story beforehand, this piece may lend the chron a little more depth.

This is a dense piece and I don't expect everyone who liked last week's chron to fall for this one in equal measure. But the only thing you can always rely on with the chronicles (apart from, I hope, high quality) is variety. Smile

This is a new entry in our chronicle series, published on Monday every other week.

Tasha Voronina
Caldari
Caldari Navy Reserve Force
Posted - 2009.05.04 18:23:00 - [2]
 

I'm at a loss of words here... "brilliant" doesn't quite cut it. It is a nice follow-up on the previous chronicle (the one you refer to) though.


I wonder... will Lauder find a way out of his own world, to become a different man and perhaps overcome his depression? The end doesn't sound like it Sad

Myxx
Atropos Group
Posted - 2009.05.04 18:50:00 - [3]
 

Brilliant as always. Reading the chronicle you referred to put things in perspective quite nicely. Interesting to see a peek into the life of one of the "normal" population.

Wonder what will occur next for him?

Pottsey
Enheduanni Foundation
Posted - 2009.05.05 06:17:00 - [4]
 

Edited by: Pottsey on 05/05/2009 06:23:42
Abraxas what happened to the Gallante election? Shouldnt the campaigns have started? The people should be up in arms. Could you imagine the US or UK skipping an election.

What happend to all the opposition campaigns. Are Senator Eman Autrech or Senator Mentas Blaque running this time? Last time there where massive campaigns even involving pod pilots.

I am not sure this is your area. But you seemed the best bet as its a major part of the story. Could you give who ever is in charge of game events a nudge and remind them there should be a major election. It has been 4 years since the last election. Unless I missed something and the gallante is no longer a Democracy or the current leader is an illegal one.

Canadian Fire
Collins Robert Inc
Posted - 2009.05.05 08:57:00 - [5]
 

Words cannot describe the awesomeness factor held by your stories.

There wasn't even a single typo, either!

I think.

Trenjeska
Chumly Incorporated
Posted - 2009.05.05 12:19:00 - [6]
 

Wellwell, thats's what you get when meddling too much with implants. He should create more and make a fortune out of them for those rich bastard capsuleers ;)
Flying in their little shuttles thinking they are Titans :P

Deviana Sevidon
Gallente
Panta-Rhei
Butterfly Effect Alliance
Posted - 2009.05.05 12:21:00 - [7]
 

Originally by: Pottsey
Edited by: Pottsey on 05/05/2009 06:23:42
Abraxas what happened to the Gallante election? Shouldnt the campaigns have started? The people should be up in arms. Could you imagine the US or UK skipping an election.

What happend to all the opposition campaigns. Are Senator Eman Autrech or Senator Mentas Blaque running this time? Last time there where massive campaigns even involving pod pilots.

I am not sure this is your area. But you seemed the best bet as its a major part of the story. Could you give who ever is in charge of game events a nudge and remind them there should be a major election. It has been 4 years since the last election. Unless I missed something and the gallante is no longer a Democracy or the current leader is an illegal one.


The Gallente Election is already over. The Event was closed month before the start of factional warfare. In the Empyrrean Age is even mentioned, that Foiritan the old and new president, was so popular, that there was a change in the Gallente constitution, so that he could be elected another time.

Ospie
Ransom and Kill
Core.Impulse
Posted - 2009.05.05 14:11:00 - [8]
 

Well, that really was something. As a sufferer of depression myself I can relate to some of the feelings particulary towards the end as he realised there was a way he could yet travel in his mind, some hope :)

Thanks.

Mavrk
Minmatar
TOP GUHN
Posted - 2009.05.05 15:41:00 - [9]
 

"there was at least the faintest glimmer of hope."

He's screwed right?

Pottsey
Enheduanni Foundation
Posted - 2009.05.05 16:02:00 - [10]
 

Deviana Sevidon said "The Gallente Election is already over. The Event was closed month before the start of factional warfare. In the Empyrrean Age is even mentioned, that Foiritan the old and new president, was so popular, that there was a change in the Gallente constitution, so that he could be elected another time."
That would explain it although the timelines are a big confusing. That means this yearís election was hold 1 year early? But I donít recall just before FW being able to vote and I donít recall any campaigns like last election. Did I miss both?
Wasnít it EA had the Gallente constitution changed so he could be elected again but a Vote was still needed this May to stay in power?

He was elected 4 years ago, 3 years ago the Gallente constitution changed so he could be re elected meaning this May as I understand it he needs re-electing. Surely he cannot just say I am popular I automatically get elected. There has to be a vote.

Horatius Caul
Amarr
Kitzless
Posted - 2009.05.05 16:18:00 - [11]
 

Gallente President Souro Foiritan started serving his current term in November 108, defeating Mentas Blaque after a special election following Foiritan's alteration to the constitution.

On topic: Brilliant work, Abraxas. Also, the art for this piece was exceptional, I think.


Shiro McCloud
Posted - 2009.05.05 16:54:00 - [12]
 

Great story very out there. If I were Mr Picky of the Picky Brigade I would point out a 'save' which should be a 'cave' I think? Down towards the end. Really look forward to these keep up the good work.

Pottsey
Enheduanni Foundation
Posted - 2009.05.05 18:13:00 - [13]
 

So there was a special election a year before the real election. A special election we could not vote for. A special election without campaigns?

In that case as of this May I no longer recognise Foiritan's as a valid president. He served his 4 year team and I and others were not allowed to vote for or against him to stay for another 4 years. If the elite cannot vote then it's not a real democracy.

Frankly I am surprised there have not been large groups of commoners on the planets rising up in arms about this. Even if Foiritan's would have won with a 90% win ratio there still should have been a vote. There still should have been campaigns like 4 years ago.

The Federation is not the type of place to let this slide without some groups kicking up a fuss.

Jimmy Duce
Chaotic Tranquility
Posted - 2009.05.05 18:31:00 - [14]
 

Jovian depression? And he has the "cure?" Nice read.

ShadowDraqon
The Quantum Company
Independent Faction
Posted - 2009.05.05 20:40:00 - [15]
 

Originally by: Trenjeska
Wellwell, thats's what you get when meddling too much with implants. He should create more and make a fortune out of them for those rich bastard capsuleers ;)
Flying in their little shuttles thinking they are Titans :P

Do want.

*Applauds and bows to Abraxas the master of storytelling*

Arushia
Nova Labs
New Eden Research.
Posted - 2009.05.05 20:51:00 - [16]
 

Originally by: Pottsey
So there was a special election a year before the real election. A special election we could not vote for. A special election without campaigns?

In that case as of this May I no longer recognise Foiritan's as a valid president. He served his 4 year team and I and others were not allowed to vote for or against him to stay for another 4 years. If the elite cannot vote then it's not a real democracy.

Frankly I am surprised there have not been large groups of commoners on the planets rising up in arms about this. Even if Foiritan's would have won with a 90% win ratio there still should have been a vote. There still should have been campaigns like 4 years ago.

The Federation is not the type of place to let this slide without some groups kicking up a fuss.



Gallente Election cycles are 5 years. Though I can only assume the constitution was changed to allow Foiritan's second term.

Link: http://www.eveonline.com/races/gallenteGov_intro.asp

RabbidFerret
Kinetic Cartel
Shadow of xXDEATHXx
Posted - 2009.05.06 04:26:00 - [17]
 

you kept me wondering where you were going with the story the whole time haha.

Very interesting, but not cold and hard enough to make it into my top 5 Very Happy

Alexeph Stoekai
Stoekai Corp
Posted - 2009.05.06 06:34:00 - [18]
 

Originally by: Pottsey
So there was a special election a year before the real election. A special election we could not vote for. A special election without campaigns?

In that case as of this May I no longer recognise Foiritan's as a valid president. He served his 4 year team and I and others were not allowed to vote for or against him to stay for another 4 years. If the elite cannot vote then it's not a real democracy.

Frankly I am surprised there have not been large groups of commoners on the planets rising up in arms about this. Even if Foiritan's would have won with a 90% win ratio there still should have been a vote. There still should have been campaigns like 4 years ago.

The Federation is not the type of place to let this slide without some groups kicking up a fuss.

Come on Pottsey. CCP stopped running player-involved events years ago. It's a bit late to start getting worked up about it now.

Apolloyian
Caldari
N.A.S.A.
Posted - 2009.05.06 20:53:00 - [19]
 

abraxas, this is one of the deepest ones you have ever done. i particularly liked the prequel to this one, and the whole "implant being a window to the mind" thing is really cool.

great job!

robohunterx
Caldari
Black Mesa
Posted - 2009.05.06 23:50:00 - [20]
 

Wow.! This was a great story. This is the first conical that i have ever read and i give it a 5/5! Great Job Very Happy

Otocinclus
Minmatar
Project Nemesis
Moar Tears
Posted - 2009.05.07 02:30:00 - [21]
 

So if I'm following this right, the "antabus-laced armor rig fluid" he drank in the original chronicle led to the malfunction of his implant? /emote demands an explanation as to why hydraulic fluid causes malfunctions in brain implants!!!!Mad

MinCalamarrEnte
Posted - 2009.05.07 13:59:00 - [22]
 

My First post here!

And I'm lost for words! Amazing story. Shocked

Cool

MCM

Hepziba
Quercus Industries
Allied Resources Coalition
Posted - 2009.05.07 14:42:00 - [23]
 

A man who discovered a cure for the Jovian depression, brilliant! It wasn't mentioned, but is the man Jovian himself?

Lucifers Advocate
State War Academy
Posted - 2009.05.07 14:54:00 - [24]
 

I read this thoroughly and was thinking throughout its entirety, "comets." Since comets follow irregular paths throughout the solar systems, they collide into and pick up other matter they encounter. As a comet would plunge through an asteroid field or a gas cloud, or attract (with gravity) the various left over ship parts and modules found in asteroid belts in 0.0 or in various mission areas found in space, it would make a very good accounting for our world as we know it and its abstract creations.

Is this to say comets will become a feature of the past, present, or future? I don't remember. Space-time itself could have folded in on itself and jumped a millennium either here or there. Who's to say? I'll let you be the judge...

Ganja Ree
Gallente
Center for Advanced Studies
Posted - 2009.05.07 16:00:00 - [25]
 

Originally by: Jimmy Duce
Jovian depression? And he has the "cure?" Nice read.


Originally by: Hepziba
A man who discovered a cure for the Jovian depression, brilliant! It wasn't mentioned, but is the man Jovian himself?


Nowhere in this chronicle, or the one preceeding it, is Jove, Jovians, or Jovian Depression ever mentioned. Depression is a common enough mental affliction to happen to nearly all sentient species, even house-pets. Jovian depression is the only kind that actually kills the afflicted as the subject spirals into incurable lethargy. Due to the Jove having FUBAR'd their own genetic/mental setup.

Pesets
The Hunt Club
Posted - 2009.05.08 13:38:00 - [26]
 

Edited by: Pesets on 08/05/2009 13:39:37
I'm kinda confused regarding those cave entrances collapsing on him. I mean, in absence of gravity, what would cause them to collapse? Certainly not him hitting some crystals, that wouldn't exert nearly enough force... the only explanation I can see is his implant acting up... but the protagonist is an engineer, an architect even, and haven't thought of that? Was his intelligence implant acting up too?

I'm even more confused about what the implants are. Does a perception implant actually replace the biological eye? My assumption was that implants are just chips that are plugged into "interfaces" (which are in turn "grafted" into the corresponding parts of the brain), and as such they work with your mind, "from inside". But in that case, the implant couldn't have a night vision mode - inability to see in near-darkness is fundamentally a limitation of eye sensitivity, not brain's ability to interpret the signal. An implant which replaces your eye could do that (if you don't mind looking like a Terminator wannabe for life) - but then, the beginning of the chronicle seems to suggest that he "plugged in" that implant himself... of course "plugging in" might be a slang term referring to a procedure that involves ocular, neural and likely cranial surgery, but I'm having trouble imagining a man performing it on himself.

Can't really say anything about the rest of the chronicle, as I haven't yet been in depression, and therefore can't relate to any of the metaphors...

CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2009.05.08 16:45:00 - [27]
 

Originally by: Tasha Voronina
I wonder... will Lauder find a way out of his own world, to become a different man and perhaps overcome his depression? The end doesn't sound like it Sad
The end, while hopeful, promises nothing, but at least Lauder didn't succumb. Smile I look at these stories as a trilogy, with the last part yet to be written. I know a few details about what'll happen in the third and final story, but I don't know how it ends.

Originally by: Shiro McCloud
If I were Mr Picky of the Picky Brigade I would point out a 'save' which should be a 'cave' I think?
I'm beginning to think there's a rule, of one typo per story, minimum. They're probably unionize.

Originally by: Jimmy Duce
Jovian depression? And he has the "cure?"
Nope, just regular depression, with all it entails. No Jove.

Originally by: Otocinclus
So if I'm following this right, the "antabus-laced armor rig fluid" he drank in the original chronicle led to the malfunction of his implant? /emote demands an explanation as to why hydraulic fluid causes malfunctions in brain implants!!!!Mad
Nope, not quite. Smile The rig fluid was just a joke, and something that tied the first story together. Lauder had modified his implant so that it opens up a direct line to parts of his brain not usually accessible by the conscious mind. It was necessary for him to handle his depression (he believes), but now it has started to break, and not in ways that he might have expected.

The story is, among other things, about what happens when a mind takes over *itself*. That's what drives the plot, and what explains the tech.

Originally by: Pesets
I'm kinda confused regarding those cave entrances collapsing on him. I mean, in absence of gravity, what would cause them to collapse?
Possibly something related to the ever-burning fire, and the ship remaking itself. Smile The implant, meanwhile, is part equipment that's been surgically inserted on a one-time basis (possibly including operation on the optical nerve), and part equipment that Lauder can insert and activate himself.

Pesets
The Hunt Club
Posted - 2009.05.09 08:42:00 - [28]
 

Originally by: CCP Abraxas
The story is, among other things, about what happens when a mind takes over *itself*. That's what drives the plot, and what explains the tech.


In other words, prolonged usage of implants causes (or at least helps cause) insanity?.. Well, that certainly seems to agree with observations... Very Happy

Originally by: CCP Abraxas
The implant, meanwhile, is part equipment that's been surgically inserted on a one-time basis (possibly including operation on the optical nerve), and part equipment that Lauder can insert and activate himself.


Which part does the night vision thing belong to?

Alexeph Stoekai
Stoekai Corp
Posted - 2009.05.10 18:54:00 - [29]
 

Originally by: Pesets

In other words, prolonged usage of implants causes (or at least helps cause) insanity?.. Well, that certainly seems to agree with observations... Very Happy
Eh, no. Deep depression and broken home-modified implants help cause insanity.

Jerricho Colton
Posted - 2009.05.11 17:28:00 - [30]
 

That was briliant Abraxas, did anyone say something about CO-creation?
I was drawn into this story like mosquito to a flame, the best part was when he after feeling scared, still vent on exploring the strange place, and acctually came out alive and with a shimmer of real hope.

9/10 stars on my scale =good stuff


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