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CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2009.04.06 14:58:00 - [1]
 

Not everyone is welcome among the Thukkers.

This is a new entry in our chronicle series, published on Monday every other week.

Alex Bester
Gallente
Hanse
Hansa Teutonica
Posted - 2009.04.06 15:16:00 - [2]
 

Of course it is not all wine and roses with the reintegration of the "lost" tribes.
Quite beautiful put Abraxas.

Horatius Caul
Amarr
Kitzless
Posted - 2009.04.06 16:57:00 - [3]
 

I love this. One of the best chronicles I've seen in a long time.

Gabrielle Stormbringer
Posted - 2009.04.06 18:37:00 - [4]
 

Edited by: Gabrielle Stormbringer on 06/04/2009 19:17:53
Edited by: Gabrielle Stormbringer on 06/04/2009 18:45:20
smexy

Every other week is simply too long :< it makes my soul wither like a tree without water and thou art mine rain..

Rhys Onasi
Posted - 2009.04.06 20:23:00 - [5]
 

Edited by: Rhys Onasi on 06/04/2009 20:27:28
Edited by: Rhys Onasi on 06/04/2009 20:27:02
The link from the front page of the website (the little section that changes, little white circles below it to manually change the view) is missing this: "default.asp?cid="

The link currently leads to a 404 error. Wink

Quote:
The old man said, "-But sometimes you can generalize. These poor people haven'tbeen"

And there's a space missing between "haven't" and "been".

(Oh noes.. I'm coming off rather negative. I LOVE THE CHRONICLES!)

Nevenda'ar
Posted - 2009.04.06 21:07:00 - [6]
 

The part where the guy spoke of his first love made me remember mine. Coincidentally, I was also 10. Embarassed

Young Buck
Minmatar
Confusion Illusion
Posted - 2009.04.06 21:08:00 - [7]
 

Excellent as always, this one was chilling and a very good read.

Pulivin Motic
Caldari
Outer Limits Trading Company
Posted - 2009.04.06 21:51:00 - [8]
 

Excellent story! It was interesting to see how angry Yane got when the old man tried to comfort him, looks like scars that deep dont heal.

Grek Forto
Crosshair Corp
Posted - 2009.04.06 23:02:00 - [9]
 

This is like a cake with topping made of awesomesauce!!!Very HappyVery HappyVery Happy

Letheeth Kayl
Amarr
Ammatar Free Corps
Curatores Veritatis Alliance
Posted - 2009.04.07 01:53:00 - [10]
 

Aw.
Sad story.

I really liked the style relying heavily on dialogue, with a different pattern for the actions. I did notice one typo: haven'tbeen in Olaer's reply after Yane explained how he felt about the Nefantar and Starkmanir.

As always, wonderful job, Abraxas. Yane proved to be far more interesting than he originally appeared, and Olaer more educated than would seem.

Rakshasa Taisab
Caldari
Sane Industries Inc.
Posted - 2009.04.07 02:40:00 - [11]
 

Edited by: Rakshasa Taisab on 07/04/2009 02:40:12
No hot yaoi action? I must say the ending disappointed, at the time it was getting to its most exciting point.

Laszlo Ozawa
Posted - 2009.04.07 06:07:00 - [12]
 

hey abraxas, quality has gone up markedly since you started doing this. the pacing here was really nice and engaging, well done.

Nikilaiki Ruutarhara
Caldari
Project Daedalid
Posted - 2009.04.07 06:22:00 - [13]
 

A very personal feel to this one. The ending felt a little rushed, a little detached. I do have a question for you; was it hard writing this particular piece? Like I said, it has a very personal feel to it. The physical descriptions seemed a little strained, but the emotional aspect of the story was dead on.

Lusulpher
Gallente
Posted - 2009.04.07 06:35:00 - [14]
 

Edited by: Lusulpher on 07/04/2009 06:35:52
Coincidentally, moving away from my first love(8 yr old ) also forced me to look at the world I live in.

A focus(rabid obsession) with the history of racism and politics quickly followed.

Looking back, it's like I lived on another planet, a gentler, simpler world where boys and girls could hold hands and read minds and not realize the world of **** they had stepped into..."Culture", tradition, what a total load of crap.

Minmatar from the cradle to the grave.YARRRR!!(Still love you Jasmine, my desi princess)Confused

P.S. Thanks for ruining my day Abraxas, and I have been checking this site for a week for the Chronicles!


Wolfie
Posted - 2009.04.07 09:31:00 - [15]
 

Quote:
The world was still spinning on strange axes.


I think it should be Axis

Sun'Tzu Yin
Gallente
Wreckage Reclamation Enforcement Consortium
Gentlemen's Interstellar Nightclub
Posted - 2009.04.07 14:27:00 - [16]
 

Axes, as in more than one axis. That's what you call subtlety.

CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2009.04.07 17:26:00 - [17]
 

Originally by: Gabrielle Stormbringer
Every other week is simply too long :< it makes my soul wither like a tree without water and thou art mine rain..
Incidentally, on this subject: Everyone going to the Fanfest remembers to say hi to the nice writer man and water him with beer, right?

Originally by: Rhys Onasi
The link from the front page of the website (the little section that changes, little white circles below it to manually change the view) is missing this: "default.asp?cid=" And there's a space missing between "haven't" and "been". (Oh noes.. I'm coming off rather negative.
It's totally fine. Believe me, I want you guys to point these things out as soon as you spot them. I've fixed the spelling error and will get the link corrected after Easter.

Originally by: Rakshasa Taisab
No hot yaoi action?
You clearly missed last Fanfest's play...

Originally by: Nikilaiki Ruutarhara
I do have a question for you; was it hard writing this particular piece? Like I said, it has a very personal feel to it.
It is a very personal story, as are many of the chronicles, but it wasn't hard to write. I often use fiction to inspect people and past events, as it provides more impetus for me to write the stories, and sometimes - if I do it well - strikes a chord with the readers.

The only piece in recent memory I've had any trouble with was something that involved the Sansha; it was enveloped in such unremitting darkness that upon its completion I basically had to take the rest of the day off. You'll see it late this year, likely.

Rhys Onasi
Posted - 2009.04.07 19:25:00 - [18]
 

Originally by: CCP Abraxas

The only piece in recent memory I've had any trouble with was something that involved the Sansha; it was enveloped in such unremitting darkness that upon its completion I basically had to take the rest of the day off. You'll see it late this year, likely.


ShockedShockedShocked
Oh my...

Can't wait!

Jaratsri
Veto.
Veto Corp
Posted - 2009.04.08 06:45:00 - [19]
 

Nice slow paced story, liked it a lot.

Loved the mood the entire setting had, good work as usual =)

And as for
Originally by: CCP Abraxas

The only piece in recent memory I've had any trouble with was something that involved the Sansha; it was enveloped in such unremitting darkness that upon its completion I basically had to take the rest of the day off. You'll see it late this year, likely.

Do want to read.

Dex Timor
Valklear Guard
Posted - 2009.04.08 12:19:00 - [20]
 

This Chronicle and Terms are my favourites.

Short, yet packed with emotions.

(And they come with beautiful artwork aswell)

Mon Fin
Gallente
Carniffles Corp
Posted - 2009.04.08 12:22:00 - [21]
 

Edited by: Mon Fin on 08/04/2009 12:22:21
Nice written.

Like it a lot.

Ninja edit: First page Laughing

No'akai
Minmatar
House Aratus
Posted - 2009.04.08 12:46:00 - [22]
 

I'm probably just extremly slow... But what the hell is "Rebuilding"? o,O

Megan Maynard
Minmatar
Navigators of the Abyss
Posted - 2009.04.08 13:36:00 - [23]
 

So, anyone want to explain wtf is going on? Because the ending made zero sense.

Adrian Reed
Posted - 2009.04.08 14:08:00 - [24]
 

Great Job Love IT

Blake Rathen
Caldari
Yurai-Tenshin Zaibatsu
Ishuk-Raata Enforcement Directive
Posted - 2009.04.08 15:10:00 - [25]
 

Edited by: Blake Rathen on 08/04/2009 15:10:54
Wonderful. One of my favourite Chronicles! Emotionally charged, with a personal issue to which any reader can relate: the past.
I liked how the characters sized each other up (okay, mostly Yane via Olaer) and we learned about them that way. I agree, that the ending seemed a bit cutoff, though the scene was effectively over. I just wanted a little more of a hint that each man would come away impacted by the encounter...
Thanks, Abraxas.

Jowen Datloran
Caldari
Science and Trade Institute
Posted - 2009.04.14 09:49:00 - [26]
 

Beautiful.

Though I, for some reason, feel like there are some loose threads that wasn't completely covered (intentionally or not). Seems like somebody have a hate/love relationship with the Amarr, and I wonder what family that girl belonged to.

Tea Feltar
Posted - 2009.04.15 20:14:00 - [27]
 

Originally by: No'akai
I'm probably just extremly slow... But what the hell is "Rebuilding"? o,O


Rebuilding is a way to bring someone back form a podkill. This differs from cloning, at least from what i got from the novel, in that cloning places birthmarks, defects, and scars onto the clone.

Rebuilding creates a clone without defects. Yane was rebuilt "the Thukker way" in that he was taken to before his thoughts about the Amarrian girl were considered acceptable, and left with the scar that bears a reminder that Minimatar and Amarr don't mix.

The story is based on the idea that we are all born without a knowing of what is socially acceptable, then are taught by our elders on what is acceptable, or not. In our later years we begin to decide for ourselves what is right.

Yane is angry about what happened to him, and must think about the amarrian girl a lot. He lives in solitude and wrecks his soul by living the loss of her. The scar embedded the thoughts of what a true thukker is. When he talks of the Nef and Starks he sees them as failures in their society. They don't fit into what he was taught.

It is evident to Olaer that Yane has thoughts that aren't his own. Yane has decided what is right. He flies with Thukkers, but when not in space he dedicates his time to saving others from what happened to him.

Please correct anything that I got wrong here.

Rac Blanco
Posted - 2009.04.19 01:45:00 - [28]
 

Thanks for the story. I do like reading the stories put out by CCP. One questions, and sorry to sound negative, but they all seem to be very "dark"/sad/gruesome. Is no one in the Eve-verse happy or optimistic?

Maybe this is a culture thing, I do not know. I do not mean to say everyone should have a happen ending, but I find very few in the stories.

CCP Abraxas

Posted - 2009.04.19 16:18:00 - [29]
 

Originally by: Megan Maynard
So, anyone want to explain wtf is going on? Because the ending made zero sense.
One of these people is rather more marked by the past than the other, and it may have driven him to do some dark things.


Originally by: Jowen Datloran
Though I, for some reason, feel like there are some loose threads that wasn't completely covered (intentionally or not). Seems like somebody have a hate/love relationship with the Amarr, and I wonder what family that girl belonged to.
It's not so much a hate/love thing as an obsession, with something that was once the girl herself and is now what the girl represents. Short stories tend to leave things unresolved, inasmuch as they focus only on some deciding moment and rarely explain the aftermath.


Originally by: Rac Blanco
One questions, and sorry to sound negative, but they all seem to be very "dark"/sad/gruesome. Is no one in the Eve-verse happy or optimistic?

Maybe this is a culture thing, I do not know. I do not mean to say everyone should have a happen ending, but I find very few in the stories.
Most of the stories (the ones I've written, at least, which is the bulk of the last two+ years of publication) are rather dark, though I'd argue that they're not entirely hopeless. "In the Pits" sees the protagonist survive against terrible odds, "The Part Where I Play the Devil" has an entire planet saved from its ruler, "Of God and her Beast" finds the protagonist unexpectedly saved from himself, and so on. I'm not sure it's possible to properly portray happiness and optimism in fiction without having it be either oversimplified (and unbelievable) or pointless to read. We need conflict. Smile


Originally by: Tea Feltar
Please correct anything that I got wrong here.
That's a really nice explanation of the story. It's much better than what I had in mind. Smile

Tea Feltar
Posted - 2009.05.05 16:41:00 - [30]
 

Originally by: CCP Abraxas
Originally by: Tea Feltar
Please correct anything that I got wrong here.
That's a really nice explanation of the story. It's much better than what I had in mind. Smile


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